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Monday, November 1, 2010

Logline Blogfest - oh my


Remember last week when I mentioned I'd signed up for a blogfest but couldn't remember the who/what/when?  How ironic that I discover it on Mock Me Monday. (feel free to commence mocking).

As luck would have it...it's the Logline blogfest.  Think there's a contest too, but obviously you should look elsewhere for details since I'm sorta scrambling to catch up here. 


And because I forgot about this one, my logline is a little dissheveled...the one I had on file is TWO PARAGRAPHS long.  Starting from scratch here:

Life of a porcelain god ain't all it's cracked up to be.  Bored out of his ever-lovin'-17-centuries-old mind, Murphy consistently pushes the boundaries and his luck.  Fed up, his mama sends him to Earth for a crash course in human sensitivity training.  In order to return and have his powers unbound, Murphy must learn to appreciate the mortals he's been dissin' for centuries.

All input appreciated!  

22 comments:

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

Is porcelain fired in a kiln? Maybe it's not all it's fired up to be!
Yeah, that's a stretch...

lbdiamond said...

Ha! Love it! The tone is humorous--does that carry through to the manuscript? If so, then you've nailed the voice. Nice.

LTM said...

Love the funny tone! And human sensitivity training for a porcelain god... "All it's cracked up to be." you goof~ :D <3

Bish Denham said...

Porcelain...could he possibly be related to toilet bowls?

Meredith said...

Love it! It's got the perfect amount of humor and voice. Is it porcelain like toilet or porcelain like the material?

Dawn said...

Love this. I want to read your book now!

notesfromnadir said...

This is very catchy! :)

gideon 86 said...

This the best, it has humor, it has the who, what, where, and when. IF you bring this to the book, I want a copy!

Michael

Steena Holmes said...

Okay Vicki - I totally didn't even clue in earlier when you mentioned the blogfest ;) D'uh! I'm glad you joined though!

Love the voice, you did a great job with your logline! I have to ask, since it's the first thing that came to mind - porcelain god - I'm think the toilet god? (don't roll your eyes at me). LOL

Jolene Perry said...

Ok - that's hysterical.

Shellie said...

This is a great log line, Vicki. I particularly love "bored out of his ever-lovin-17-centuries-old mind". It tells the reader right away he's an ancient teenager with attitude. Brilliant! Also, first sentence sparks interest, what's a porcelain god? He could be a person of lily-white complexion, or maybe the guardian of toilets. Good luck with the contest.

vbtremper said...

Hey Vicki,

Nice to meet another one who spells it the same way. The voice in this is great! But can you get this down to 2 sentences?

Good luck,
Vicki

Saumya said...

Yayyy looove it!! Your voice really shines through :)

Kimberly Franklin said...

Haha! Cute. I love it! :)

Nicole Zoltack said...

The voice is great! But I don't know what to suggest in order to get it down to two sentences.

RaShelle said...

Very funny voice. It does need to be shortened. Other than that, great!

Rachel Morgan said...

Love the voice! This sounds like it would be an enjoyable read :-)

Marieke said...

So cute! :D And a good sense of voice, however I'm not entirely sure what to make of the story. (Though that may just be because work fried my brain.) Sounds like a lot of fun!

Jamie said...

Oh I'd definitely read this one! Great voice! The only thing I would like to see mentioned is a tiny piece of what happens when he gets to Earth - maybe he falls in love with a human, maybe he decides to take over and rule...whatever it is, I think a hint at it would be great. But what you have is great!

Rachael Harrie said...

Yep, great voice! If you're trying to shorten it, I think you could combine sentences 2 and 3 (plus add a tiny reference to him being a god - not sure about the porcelain bit though). Then that's your first sentence, and the last is your second.

Good luck with it.

Rach

Carolina Valdez Miller said...

Such a fantastic log line, Vicki!! I'd buy it for sure. Sounds like a fun book to read. The humor comes through just in the first sentence. Fab premise, my dear!

Stina Lindenblatt said...

This is great and I love the voice, but you have to get it down to one sentence for a logline. ;)

If you're participating in the MSFV auction, you can two sentences.

Bored out of his ever-lovin'-17-centuries-old mind, Murphy consistently pushes the boundaries and his luck, until his mama sends him to Earth for a crash course in human sensitivity training. In order to return and have his powers unbound, Murphy must learn to appreciate the mortals he's been dissin' for centuries.